Tsunami
wave after wave of energy, an empty dance floor
just you and I, near the speaker, by the door
bead after bead of cold sweat, encrusting my palm
just you and I, letting our hair down, punk rock
thought after thought, my mind racing, looking you over
you smile, toss your head, and we’re both down on our knees
beat after beat, hearing the bass overtake me
oblivious to everything, save the music, and you
song after song, long solos, lovely, lovely guitar
I watch you, as the chords run down your spine
shiver after shiver of envy, running through the room
as you hold me, look into my eyes, toss your head back
wave after wave of glory, I love the way you smell,
the way you taste, the way you dance like nobody’s watching.
stare after stare from the hallway, people who disapprove
but we don’t care, we’re one, moulded by the bond will we never share,
tear after tear, wetting my shirt, I feel you quiver, hold you
as we dance our last, the one we love, the one we will learn to hate,
you let go, and fade back, towards the doorway,
you to your world, and I to mine.
wave after wave of energy, gone but not forgotten
standing by speaker, near the door, I listen, but do not feel.













Devious Comments
Imagery is also fantastic. Creates a clear, vibrant picture in the reader's mind. It also combines other senses, which is very skilful.... sound primarily, but also smell and taste a little.
This is great stuff.
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I am glad I came back to read this
jeeeeesus
absolutely amazing
my only bit of crit would be that "dance like nobody’s watching" is a tad trite
but really it fits... so yeah
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